Wordiness

Wordiness means using more words than necessary within a sentence, especially short, vague words that do not add much meaning.

Avoid wordiness in your essays whenever possible, since it makes your ideas difficult to follow. Eliminating wordiness will make your sentences more concise (to-the-point) while retaining the original meaning. The following are examples of wordy sentences, along with more concise ones: 

1-     I really love my daughter very much from the bottom of my heart.

·         I love my daughter.

2-     In my essay paper, I wrote about my absolute hopes and desires.

·         In my essay, I wrote about my desires.

3-     The honest truth is that I really do not like shrimp very much.

·        I dislike shrimp.

Practice

Our neighbor who lives in the house next door has been the recipient of an invitation to the governor’s ball.

2. The pies were baked by the parents of the second graders.

3. The sarcastic remarks that Linda delivered had the effect of causing everyone to become very angry.

4. Aluminium is a metal that is very light in weight.

5. The office manager wanted all the memos to be typed. She wanted all the memos to be typed so that they would be easy to read.

6. He found his neighbor who lived next door and was thirty years old to be attractive in appearance.

7. One time when I went to the park, my friend, whose name is Jake, went with me and we had fun.